We can work on Concision

2.Read the handout about how to write with clear, concise and direct style from Joseph Williams in “Style”.

3.Read the PowerPoint from Capital Community College about how to identify areas where writing can become more concise.

  1. Watch the video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=36IsNsYc7Ws

Then your task is to:

Write your three paragraph summary, analysis and response.
In addition, give an example of a wordy sentence you found in the essay you are writing, and how you revised it to be more concise.

Sample Solution

wo examples of intertextuality in fiction and film are The Hours (dir. Stephen Daldry, 2002) and Jeanette Winterson’s Oranges Are Not the Only Fruit (1985). Julia Kristeva theorises that ‘any text is constructed as a mosaic of quotations; any text is the absorption and transformation of another’ (1980, p.66). Postmodern texts suggest that the relationship between text and text is vital in adding a particular layer of depth and meaning. This essay will argue that intertextuality is a device which is used to provide added significance and connotations to a text. The Hours and Oranges are similar in the way that they use intertextuality to bring key themes and issues into a modern and contemporary light. Additionally, the way in which they each ‘absorb’ and ‘transform’ other texts, emphasises the postmodernist awareness that texts do not exist solely in isolation. To echo Kristeva’s theory that texts are ‘an absorption’ (p.1988, p.66) of other texts, The Hours follows a very similar syntactic structure to Mrs Dalloway (1925). Both texts follow and tell the story and events of one day and have comparable plot points; buying flowers in the opening scenes, preparations for parties etc. Paul Claes argues that a syntactic structure can be modified in four ways: addition, repetition, substitution and deletion (2011); this theory can be explored in The Hours. One key difference is that The Hours tells the story of three women rather than just one. This addition is effective as it offers new aspects and insights to Mrs Dalloway. For instance, the character of Virginia Woolf depicts the writing process of the novel itself, the character of Laura Brown portrays the reception of Mrs Dalloway, and finally, Clarissa’s character and storyline highlights the retelling and update of the novel. Another transformation to The Hours is the addition of two new time eras: the early 1950s and the beginning of the twenty-first century. This reconstruction is particularly effective as it highlights the different issues that each woman has in each time period, bringing to light the multiplicity of new problems that arise with modernity. As aforementioned, there are notable points of repetition that crossover in both texts. For instance, all three characters are preparing for a party/event of some kind. They each reflect on a particular experience that resonates with them, and lastly, the topic of suicide or potential suicide is prevalent in both texts. Linda Hutcheon observes that ‘the multiple and complex echoing points to the different possible functions of intertextuality… can both thematically and formally reinforce the text’s message’ (2003, p.138). This theory can be ap>

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